I love your story. I liked your use of capitals to show a raised voice in the second chapter but the capitals in the first paragraph should be changed to normal writing as that is not shouting. This should have been non-fiction but I can see you have worked hard on this. Well done!
I love your story. I liked your use of capitals to show a raised voice in the second chapter but the capitals in the first paragraph should be changed to normal writing as that is not shouting. This should have been non-fiction but I can see you have worked hard on this. Well done!